Showing emotion in prose: An angry flush stained his cheeks and he balled his fists.In the first example, we name the emotion, but also show the reader what that emotion looks like. This is just one way to show vs tell when it comes to emotion, and it’s generally the first layer.
Showing emotion in prose: He flexed his hands, balling them into fists as a crimson flush stormed up his neck.In the second example, we use angry/ready-for-battle language (stormed) instead of naming the emotion, but understand he’s angry. This is the second layer when showing emotion.
I’ve gone on about what Deep POV is. Now, how to execute. *cracks knuckles* I see this question a LOT:
“In Deep POV, do I italicize or NOT italicize thoughts?”
The answer is, if you’re executing in Deep POV, there ARE no thoughts to italicize, because those thoughts are already part of the prose. (Don’t tear your hair out. Bear with me).
‘Like hell I will,’ she thought. “Sure, Jim.”1st person: Like hell I will. This guy’s got some balls. “Sure Jim…”
3rd Person: Hell would freeze over before Trace did this guy’s work. “Sure, Jim.” (11
That’s a start. Here’s a good resource: Rivet Your Readers With Deep Point of View, by Jill Elizabeth Nelson.
Now, back to the original question.
We’ve discussed showing emotions. Now on to showing emotion through Deep POV. First, a how-to, then examples.
1: Learn who your character really is. Pretend you’re a therapist. Who are they? What makes them tick? What are their circumstances? On the surface, what’s their trauma?
By trauma here, I mean the thing that haunts them. An incident, a lost loved one, etc.
3. After you’ve read all about the Emotional Wound, and used the worksheets, then identified your character’s wound from the wound profiles in that amazing book, you will now have an in-depth idea of who your character is.
Next. Become the character. Get inside their head.
2. Dig DEEP into your character’s wound…the thing that contributes to their trauma/prevents them from dealing w/h trauma
3. Develop character Voice
4. Connect emotion to not only the character, bt what’s happening in the scene.
5. Get in MC’s head